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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate different
age
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 groups of the community of Yemenis and Italians throughout the
period
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 between 2000 and 2050, respectively.
Overall
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, Yemen and Italy will experience enormous changes in population in the future. Even though
,
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the
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Yemen’s middle
age
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group
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 is predicted to follow a significant rise, the percentage of its youngest category is expected to fall in the same
period
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.
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, the situation in Italy differs a lot. The
group
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 of adults and youngest will fall slightly,
whereas
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 the oldest
age
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group
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 is estimated to have a major increase. In terms of Yemen, the 65+ population is predicted to escalate minimally from 3.6 per
cent
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 in 2000 to 5.7 per
cent
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 in 2050.
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, 15-59-year-old people are envisioned to follow an upward trend, which is anticipated to increase from 46.3
percent
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per cent
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 in 2000 to 57.3
percent
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per cent
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 in 2050.
Percentage
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The percentage
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 of the youngest
age
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group
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 will decrease gradually from 50.1 per
cent
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 to 37 per
cent
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 in
this
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period
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.
According to
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 the graph, the mature
adult’s
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adult
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 population is expected to experience
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growth considerably, rising from 24.1 per
cent
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 to 42.3 per
cent
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. Meanwhile, the other two categories will fall substantially during the
period
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 of 50 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, period, group, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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