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Some people think governments should spend money looking for life on other planets, while others think that there are many unsolved problems on earth. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #governments #money #life #planets #earth
Some individuals believe authorities should allocate funds in
order
 to discover
for
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life on alternative planets,
whereas
 others feel that there several unsolved
issues
 on our planets. In my opinion,
the
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lawmakers should spend
public
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the public
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budegt
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budget
 to
addressing
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 the
issues
in
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on
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earth
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instead
 of
space
 programs. On the one hand, some argue that
space
researches
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is
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 crucial
,
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 because
th
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the
earth
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Earth
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face
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a huge problems
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a huge problem
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. To illustrate, global warming and climate change can make
impossible
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it impossible
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 for
people
 to live on
earth
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Earth
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 later in future .
This
 is because in future we will expect
raising
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temerature
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temperature
temperatures
 and sea
leves
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level
levels
 of
earth
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the earth
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, which means these factors can
leads
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 to dying
people
 result of heatwaves and
also
 can increase
the
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natural disasters namely floods,
famine
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and famine
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.
On the other hand
 , I agree with
thoses
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those
people
 who believe that governments should spend the money in
order
 to tackle
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earth's
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earth
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 problems rather than supporting
space
 projects. I believe the governments should spend money on eco-friendly projects
such
 as
,
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 solar, wind,
geothermal
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and geothermal
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 energy in
order
reduce
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the
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Co2 emissions and
then
 mitigate environmental
issues
such
 as
,
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climate change, global warming, and pollution.
Furthermore
, the governments should spend these dollars to build more
desalinations
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desalination
 power plants in
order
 to
provides
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 more fresh water for
people
.
Additionally
, the authorities should invest these funds to improve the basic infrastructure, healthcare, education, and public transport , which these infrastructure can offer better
live
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 standards for
people
. In conclusion, in my perspective,
the
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lawmakers should invest funds in
to
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adderssing
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addressing
crucial
issues
in
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on
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 the
earth
such
 as
,
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environmental
issues
, shortage of fresh water, and
enhance
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enhancing
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 infrastructure rather than spend
this
 money
in
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space
 programs.
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