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Some people think governments should spend money looking for life on other planets, while others think that there are many unsolved problems on earth. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #governments #money #life #planets #earth
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Some individuals believe authorities should allocate funds in
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 to discover
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life on alternative planets,
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 others feel that there several unsolved
issues
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 on our planets. In my opinion,
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lawmakers should spend
public
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the public
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budegt
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budget
 to
addressing
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 the
issues
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earth
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instead
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 of
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 programs. On the one hand, some argue that
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researches
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is
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 crucial
,
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 because
th
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the
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earth
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face
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a huge problems
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a huge problem
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. To illustrate, global warming and climate change can make
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it impossible
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 for
people
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 to live on
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earth
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 later in future .
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 is because in future we will expect
raising
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a raising
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temerature
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temperature
temperatures
 and sea
leves
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level
levels
 of
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earth
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, which means these factors can
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 to dying
people
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 result of heatwaves and
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 can increase
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natural disasters namely floods,
famine
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and famine
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.
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 , I agree with
thoses
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those
people
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 who believe that governments should spend the money in
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 to tackle
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earth
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 problems rather than supporting
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 projects. I believe the governments should spend money on eco-friendly projects
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 as
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 solar, wind,
geothermal
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and geothermal
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 energy in
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reduce
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the
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Co2 emissions and
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 mitigate environmental
issues
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 as
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climate change, global warming, and pollution.
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, the governments should spend these dollars to build more
desalinations
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desalination
 power plants in
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 to
provides
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 more fresh water for
people
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.
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, the authorities should invest these funds to improve the basic infrastructure, healthcare, education, and public transport , which these infrastructure can offer better
live
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 standards for
people
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. In conclusion, in my perspective,
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lawmakers should invest funds in
to
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adderssing
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addressing
crucial
issues
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in
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 the
earth
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such
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,
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environmental
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, shortage of fresh water, and
enhance
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enhancing
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 infrastructure rather than spend
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 money
in
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space
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