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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Transport is a vital issue which affects many industries, from tourism to day-to-day office work,
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 careful consideration must be carried out when deciding where the funds must go. In my view, resources should be allocated to improving the existing public transport, rather than constructing new railway lines,
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 the desperate need in the former sphere. On the one hand, constructing new railway lines can be quite beneficial as it can get people from A to B much faster and so is more efficient - an example of
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 is the HS2
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 being built in the UK, which will reduce travel time from Manchester to London drastically. It
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 acts as an attraction for visitors of the country to come and see the new technology and provides new jobs and income for locals.
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, there is already an infrastructure in place for development. Take
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 the London Underground, which has been around for 150 years -
last
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 year the new Elizabeth
line
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 opened, which added to the existing infrastructure. It retained the history of the London Underground, whilst
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 modernising it and providing an attraction to tourists. My thoughts are simple -
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 of designating a lot of the
taxpayers
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 money on new train lines, the existing ones should be improved. There is plenty that can be done to improve the infrastructure
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 already present.
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 just means there would be more money left for the government to use on more needy causes,
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 as homelessness and the NHS.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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