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The chart below compare the number of people per household* in the UK in 1981 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below compare the number of people per household* in the UK in 1981 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates
what
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that
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number
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the number
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 of individuals per
household
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 has changed over the period of 20 years in the country UK.
Overall
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, there used to be more
number of
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apply
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individuals who used to live in a single
household
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 compared to the next 20
years
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years'
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 data. In 1981,
The
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apply
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people
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 used to live more together in a
household
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 compared to a
single person
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single-person
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household
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. Relatively it could be the reason
of
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for
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 having a joint family in 1981. In a
household
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 there used to be 6
people
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 which has
substancially
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substantially
 fallen down and in 2001 it has dropped to two households who are living with more than 6
people
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. When
looked
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looking
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 at the
two person
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two-person
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household
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 there can be
a
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apply
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merely different
numbers
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number
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 but they are yet almost the same. What immense change could be seen is in the single person
household
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 where in 1981 it used to be 17 households and in 2001 it has immensely increased to 26 households.
Due to
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 inflation and other interpersonal relationship
problem
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problems
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people
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 in 2001
has
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apply
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preferred to live
to
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apply
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alone compared to the past 20
years
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years'
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 record.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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