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Writing Task 2: Some people think that developing countries need financial help form international organizations. Others think that is practical aid and advice that is needed. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

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People hold different views about what developing
countries
 need. Some hold the opinion that economic
suport
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support
 from global organizations is useful
while
other
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 enunciate the idea it is practical aid and advice
that is
 better. I will discuss both views and give my personal perspective opinion in the following essay On the one hand, some people argue it is best to provide financial help for developing
countries
. They point out supporting money for those
countries
 to carry out kind of functions
such
 as improving infrastructure, providing food, water and accommodation for the needy,
healthcare
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 social. Not only avoid economic difficulties but
also
boost
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 economic progress.
On the other hand
, I personally believe that it is more beneficial for developing nations to receive practice aid and advice which
are play
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vital
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 role
for
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futher
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further
 development.
Sustainable
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 increase does not depend on money at all,
furthermore
 even if
citizen's
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 knowledge in a country
as well as
scientific
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 level is at a basic standard, the nation is not
breakthrough
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 no matter how much money it received. In conclusion, it seems to me that it is better for developing
countries
 to put an emphasis on receiving practical aid and advice rather than financial support.
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