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Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To extent do you agree or disagree?

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The question of whether higher
education
 tuition should be abolished irrespective of
the
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socioeconomic background has been debated hotly among academics and politicians. One school of thought holds that governments should impose a free-college policy. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on my disagreement. It is understandable why a bulk of
people
 subscribe to the notion that making higher
education
 free of charge is the responsibility of governments. One valid reason is enhancing living standards.
This
 is because bachelor's degree holders tend to secure high-paid jobs
such
 as bank management or CEO in big firms.
Therefore
, if the underprivileged who can not afford educational tuition have a chance to access tertiary
education
 through government scholarships, they are more likely to escape poverty.
However
, despite the aforementioned benefit, I believe that covering educational fees can do more harm than good. First and foremost, the unemployment rate may increase
due to
this
 policy. To be specific, the job market has been competitive as it is for those
people
 who have qualifications. If more
people
 enrol in formal
education
 and hold college degrees
while
 the number of applicants employed annually does not increase proportionally, the huge number of
people
 who could not find decent jobs is what we can predict.
This
 issue not only affects learners but
also
 puts a strain on government coffers, leading to tax hikes, and reduced welfare. Another justification is deteriorating academic performance. The logic behind
this
 is that students feel poor performance at school does not cost them anything,
hence
 they may not study in earnest and apply themselves to getting good scores. In conclusion,
while
 it is irrefutable that wholly subsidizing higher
education
 tuition can bring some advantages, I would contend that government should let students pay for their own
education
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • Accessibility
  • Social mobility
  • Meritocracy
  • Economic growth
  • Equality
  • Subsidize
  • Fiscal sustainability
  • Human capital
  • Incentivize
  • Underfunded
  • Tuition fees
  • Academic achievement
  • Workforce
  • Tax burden
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