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In some countries young people are encouraged to work and travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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In various nations,
younger
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 population is being motivated to take a gap year in order to gain some
work
experience
 or travel around before they start with their
further
 college education. In
this
 essay, we will be focusing on the advantages of
this
 situation
as well as
 the disadvantages that come along. To start with the advantages, younger education today is more motivated to gain a global
experience
. They do not want themselves to be restricted to the local area
experience
 they are being provided with, rather they want to explore the world and try learning about the
work
 culture and other aspects. Now as we know it is quite important to have knowledge about the field one is going to
work
 in,
work
experience
 will definitely help them grow and flourish in that area as real-life scenarios can be much different than what is being taught in books. Moving on to the disadvantages, though it is important to gain some knowledge of the real world and travel around, it is
also
 important to get done with your university education in order to land the perfect job depending on the course one opts for in a university.
Secondly
, some people are not mentally strong to live apart from their families and might end up getting homesick. Which can ruin their whole idea of the gap year. To summarize, taking a drop year has certain advantages it
also
 has some possible drawbacks which should be taken into account before making the decision as these years most certainly makes up for our future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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