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more and more bussinesses as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face. Discuss the advantage and disadvantges of using technology for communicating?

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It is undeniable that there are many
people
 who used
technology
 to communicate,
for example
, we had to talk with friends through applications
such
 as Facebook messager, line, and apps.
Moreover
, some
people
 are delighted to meet their friends. On the one side of the argument, there are a number of benefits associated with reduced time for transportation for meetings.
This
 would mean that they can manage their time with what they would like to do, just pick up their telephone and call who is a purpose to communicating that so easily. Another benefit would be that it is easy to make a commitment from
business
 to
business
 because the process of operating a
business
 is many steps and have to talk with a lot of
people
,
technology
 like the telephone is the key to success.
On the other hand
, I would argue that of these disadvantages,side there are many crimes that occur online. The criminal can find personal's profiles on the internet that can steal anything of your secrets
such
 as your bank account and identification number.
This
 is the reason for some
people
 would have to discuss their
business
 in a personal area which can prevent the secret of your
business
 release to the public online there are some reasons support
face
 to
face
 is important when you talked with someone, you can touch emotions, body language who had been talked with you. In conclusion, some
people
 are still in contact with
people
 by using
technology
 online more than the meet to
face
 to
face
 because these give convenience who used it.
Moreover
, do not have anything can be only a good side. For construction, learning more about how to use
technology
 online is safe and effective which make a lot of benefits who use it in the correct way.
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