In many countries children are engaged in some kind od paid work, some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.

Child
labour is a controversial topic
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nowadays
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because
it has some particular positive impacts and detrimental effects.
However
, some group of individuals argue that
child
employment is totally harmful for
thier
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their
further
education
while
opponents state that it gain beneficial
job
experience and they perceive a liability of occupation at
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age
. I stand for the latter approach.
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essay will explore both views and state my own opinion about
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circumstances. On the one hand, when kids
involve
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in various types of
employments
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employment
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at
their
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young
age
, they lost their
valuble
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valuable
childhood.
Nevertheless
, they couldn'
t
go back to that
time
.
In addition
, young students don'
t
pay more attention
for
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their academics when they are doing
part
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time
or
full
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time
job
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. They couldn'
t
invest enough
time
for
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their studies.
In other words
,
children
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abandon
from
schools
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school
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because
they tend to earn lots of money since childhood.
Furthermore
, most
of
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employees
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attempt to take
difficult
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work from toddlers without paying
a
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adaquate
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adequate
salary.
For instance
, the
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of
education
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in
UK
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pointed out from their research that as students involve
numerous
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occupations at
the
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young
age
, they couldn'
t
get higher
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from
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the examinations
which
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hold by schools and governments. Not only that but
also
they are unable to contest in
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world
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because
of
this
reason.
However
, after considering
this
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all facts, my opinion is that we should let them for doing work with balancing their studies and
partime
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part-time
jobs.
On the other hand
, some experts in our society evaluate
child
employers
becouse
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because
they consider that it is a
greate
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great
opportunity to improve
job
skills.
Conversely
, It
affect
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to enhance a person's character and personality for
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to
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the
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future career.
Moreover
, If toddlers join any kind of employment, they could learn
real
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term
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of work and workflow.
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, they will become
a
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independent individual and
fianancialy
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financially
financial
stable person at
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age
without
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the support
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support
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their
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parents.
In addition
,
children
, who are doing in
job
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the job
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, occur a
responsibilty
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responsibility
regarding their occupation. It will influence
for
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their upcoming career.
For example
, the
explortion
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exploration
, which have done by
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of London in
past
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decade, found that former working
children
will become
a
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notable
entreprenears
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entrepreneurs
entrepreneur
in future. Not only that but
also
they will
familiar
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for
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the upcoming working methods.
Therefore
I strongly agree with
this
argument
becouse
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because
all reasons positively affect
for
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the advancement of
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the child
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child
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children
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. In conclusion,
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essay mostly
support
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the idea that
child
employment
have
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number
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of benefits.
Although
it has some unfavourable
aspect
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,
but
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my opinion is that we should let them
for
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follow
this
growing trend.
However
, I
recomend
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recommend
that government should take
a
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responsibilty
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responsibility
about
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the protection of
child
labours
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and parents have a liability to show accurate ways to build up
children's
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future life.
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