The graphs below show the average monthly expenditure on children’s sports and participation in different sports in the UK from 2008 to 2014.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graphs below show the average monthly expenditure on children’s sports and participation in different sports in the UK from 2008 to 2014.

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information about the median spending on

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children

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children's

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sports

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and involvement in three

sports

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in the United Kingdom over 6 years.

Overall

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, it is clear the most popular sport was

football

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among

children

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, and

also

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all kinds of

sports

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showed

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an increased

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increased

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over the given period.

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, some

sports

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reach their lowest, apex at

certain

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year. Looking at the chart in more detail,

football

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sports

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had

highest

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the highest

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number of

children

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during the whole period, in 2008 was around 8.1

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millions

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children

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,and in the two next years

the

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apply

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football

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the

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lowest at 7.9

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millions

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million

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children

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, and after that

the

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apply

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football

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showed gradually raised in

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apply

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2014 was the highest

sports

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about 9

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millions

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million

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children

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In contrast

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the

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apply

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athletics from 2008 to 2010 unchanged approximately 1. 9

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millions

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million

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children

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,and in 2012

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a peak at almost 5.9

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millions

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million

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children

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, and from 2009 to 2014 was the second

common

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most common

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sports

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sport

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3 to 5.1

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million

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millions

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children

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. Regarding swimming in

the

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apply

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2009 swimming and athletics had the same number of

children

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at almost 2.5

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million

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millions

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children

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, and from 2011 to 2014

the

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apply

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swimming has become

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the

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least popular

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sports

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sport

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from around 2.5 to 3.9

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millions

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million

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children

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Jun 28, 2023

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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, sports, football, millions with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

192 words

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The graphs below show the average monthly expenditure on children’s sports and participation in different sports in the UK from 2008 to 2014.

Develop habit of exercise among students by showing sports programmes on TV or should show other ways to encourage them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A lot of people nowadays are spending too much money and they don’t save anything for future use. Is this a positive or a negative development?

Write an essay of at least 300 words on the following topic One's true happiness should derive from their own achievements that benefit others To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects. What are the causes? What are the effects on society?