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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools . others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Dicuss both view views and give your own opinion.

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Getting an
education
 in the same institution for
boys
 and schoolgirls is a controversial topic among people. Some minds claim that for a better
education
, it is good if
both
 young men and women attend different schools
while
 others oppose
this
 viewpoint. From my perspective, co-schooling is the best thing for the betterment of everyone. On the one hand, get
an
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a
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 study in
separate
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 academy,
both
 genders feel independent where they can express their feelings and ideas without worrying to hurt others. To illustrate, if girls and
boys
 are studying together and sometimes they have to discuss something
such
 as puberty or any other subject but they can't express themselves in front of
boys
/girls
due to
 gender reasons, it means it is perfect for them to study in dividing schools.
Apart from
this
, they don't have to be so sensitive about their physical appearance.
For example
, some girls get special and ready to look more attractive and
boys
 do the same too.
On the contrary
, studying in the same schools or colleges makes the same as gender equality which leads to a better place to live for all which leads to the positive development of the nation. In
this
 new era, women and men are working together for the growth of the country so they have equal rights at work, study or any other areas.
For instance
, in the workplace or any other area, growth is only possible, if they respect each other. By having mixed
education
, they can learn a lot about themselves by sharing their feelings and viewpoint.
Thus
, it is the way for the positive development of the country.
To conclude
, there are reasons for taking
education
 in varying organizations for
both
 genders,
however
, I personally believe that the nation can develop only if the thinking of
both
 genders contributes equally which is possible by starting from co-
education
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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