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The maps show the improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.

The maps show the improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.
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The illustrations present the
university
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campus
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 which has been developed between 2010 and the present day.
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, all buildings on the
campus
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 have been expanded. Some
facilities
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 have been moved to one building and replaced with other
facilities
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. In 2010, there was a road passing through the
campus
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, which divided the
university
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 offices and first
student
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accommodation
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 at the top of the
campus
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. The lake was located at the center of the
campus
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 surrounded by the lawn & seating area.
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the Teaching block of art & science was placed at the top right of the
campus
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. The shops and restaurants were located on the right side of the
campus
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. The second
student
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accommodation
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 was located at the bottom left of the
campus
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. At present, the first
student
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accommodation
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 and lake have remained at the same location, but there is one more building added on the right side of the remaining
student
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accommodation
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. The lawn & seating area has been removed. The
university
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 office has been renovated and changed from a
university
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 office to a science building.
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, the teaching block has changed into an arts building which has been taller than before the upgrade. The second
student
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accommodation
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 has been changed into huge
student
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facilities
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 building where the shop, restaurant, and office have moved into. The shops after moving to the
student
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facilities
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 building have been replaced with new
student
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accommodation
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as well as
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 the restaurant which has been replaced with a new road to access the new
student
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accommodation
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, campus, facilities, student, accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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