The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the informationby selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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West

Park

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Secondary

School

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long history, for the past 60 years there were significant changes, which I want to observe. Let's begin with the situation in

1950s

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. As we can see the

school

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is located near the main road. Behind the

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school

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there is a large playground. If we look at the

school

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from the front side, we will see houses and

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farmland behind them.

Secondary

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, we should look at the building plan

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1980s

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the 1980s

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. Now,

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school

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the school

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has

it's

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main building and a new science block was built.

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, now near the research

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center

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there is a car

park

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and the sports field is now located at the previous farmland territory. In 2010 there were rapid changes in West

Park

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School

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building plan.

Car

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park

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now occupies

huge

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part of the

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school yard

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schoolyard

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. It has taken the territory of the old

sportsfield

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sports field

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this

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, the sportsfield and the playground are now delaying the same area and both of them were cut.

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, there were significant changes since

1950s

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the 1950s

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First,

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science

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a science

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block was built,

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area

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an area

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which uses

car

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a car

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park

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has grown. The

last

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thing is that the

sportsfield

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sports field

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became smaller

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than

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the playground.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

202 words

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the informationby selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Some teachers think that changing subjects with every lesson will help their students focus more. However, other teachers think that offering their students several lessons on the same subject in a row will help them focus more. Which opinion do you think is better?

The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

People produce more carbon emissions and garbage than in the past. Explain how it is affecting us and the measures that could be taken to address the situation. Provide specific examples and explanation to support your answer

The amount of sport shown on television every week has increased significantly and this is having an impact on live sports events. Do you think the benefits of having more televised sport are greater than the disadvantages?

Currently, there is a trend towards alternative forms of medicine. However, at the best these methods are ineffective, and worst, they may be dangerous. In what extend do you agree with this statement.