The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the informationby selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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West

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School

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long history, for the past 60 years there were significant changes, which I want to observe. Let's begin with the situation in

1950s

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. As we can see the

school

is located near the main road. Behind the

school

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there is a large playground. If we look at the

school

from the front side, we will see houses and

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farmland behind them.

Secondary

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, we should look at the building plan

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1980s

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. Now,

school

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has

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main building and a new science block was built.

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, now near the research

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center

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there is a car

park

and the sports field is now located at the previous farmland territory. In 2010 there were rapid changes in West

Park

Secondary

School

building plan.

Car

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park

now occupies

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part of the

school yard

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. It has taken the territory of the old

sportsfield

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sports field

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Besides

this

, the sportsfield and the playground are now delaying the same area and both of them were cut.

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, there were significant changes since

1950s

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First,

science

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block was built,

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an area

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which uses

car

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a car

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park

has grown. The

last

thing is that the

sportsfield

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sports field

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became smaller

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than

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the playground.

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the informationby selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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