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The figure contrasts the vegetation and temperature zones of tropical and temperate mountains.

The figure contrasts the vegetation and
temperature
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zones
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 of tropical and temperate
mountains
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.
Overall
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, tropical
mountains
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 have a wider altitude range of
temperature
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zones
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 than their temperate counterparts, which is the primary difference. It is
also
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 evident that in tropical areas, vegetation thrives at higher altitudes. Tropical
mountains
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 have a warm
zone
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 that extends up to 1600
meters
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 (5800
feet
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) above sea level and offers the perfect setting for producing tropical crops. Above
this
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, there is a temperate
zone
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 that ranges from roughly 1600 to 3100
meters
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 (1600 to 10,800
feet
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), which is suitable for growing coffee and cocoa.
Nevertheless
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, temperate
mountains
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 do not contain these two
zones
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. The remaining
temperature
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zones
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 of tropical
mountains
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 are similar to all four
zones
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 of temperate
mountains
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, including the cool
zone
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, forest,
alpine
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 meadows, and permanent
snow
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.
Firstly
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, the cool
zone
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 for grain cultivation in tropical
mountains
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 occurs at 1600
metres
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,
whereas
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 in temperate regions, it starts from sea level. Broad-leaf trees grow up to 3100
metres
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 on the former,
while
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 the limit is approximately 1400
metres
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 (5000
feet
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) on the latter.
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forests of pine and firs occur in tropical
mountains
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 from about 3100 to 4000
metres
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 (1600 to 14,100
feet
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);
however
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, in temperate
mountains
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, the limit for spruce is around 1750
metres
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 (6100
feet
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). The cold
zone
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, forest,
alpine
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 meadows, and permanent
snow
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 are among the four surviving
temperature
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zones
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 of tropical
highlands
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 that are comparable to those of temperate
mountains
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.
Firstly
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, in tropical
highlands
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, the cool
zone
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 for grain cultivation begins at 1600
meters
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,
whereas
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 in temperate regions, it begins at sea level. On the former, broad-leaf trees can reach a maximum height of 3100
meters
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, but on the latter, it is roughly 1400
meters
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 (5000
feet
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).
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forests of pine and fir grow in tropical
highlands
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 between 3100 and 4000
meters
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 (1600 and 14,100
feet
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),
whereas
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 spruce can only grow to a height of about 1750
meters
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 in temperate
mountains
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 (6100
feet
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).
Alpine
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 meadows can be found at 4000
meters
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 (14,100
feet
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) and 1700
meters
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 (6100
feet
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), respectively, in tropical and temperate mountain environments.
Alpine
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 grasses thrive better in temperate
mountains
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 with lower elevations, but evergreens tend to flourish in tropical
highlands
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due to
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 higher altitudes.
Finally
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,
whereas
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 the
snow
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 line, above which there is permanent
snow
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, is found in temperate mountain ranges at an elevation of about 2800
meters
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 (10,000
feet
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), it is found at a greater elevation of over 4300
meters
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 (16,000
feet
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) in tropical mountain ranges

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