In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
There are countries where the number of citizens who have decided to live alone
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growing
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This
essay argues that this
trend has mostly negative consequences because it reduces the country's demographics and may cause mental illnesses among individuals.
The primary reason why solo living may negatively affect society is the decreasing amount of newborn children. When a person decides not to create a family and live alone he is not able to rise
a child and continue his kind. Correct your spelling
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Although
, on a small scale this
has almost zero influence on the society, when it becomes a common tendency it may disbalance the proportion of born and dead individuals in the country. Consequently
, if there are fewer people born than died, the state will start to suffer from demographical issues, such
as a shortage of work and military power. For example
, an average male in Russia is afraid to start a family due to
political instability in the world, as a result
, there are more open positions in the companies than the man who is able to work.
The second reason why it is better to avoid living alone is the possibility of mental illnesses when an individual is isolated from society. There is a natural reflex of the human being to speak and share his ideas because we are social mammals. What is more, isolation is usually considered as a punishment. That is
why, loneliness is a negative feeling and too much of it may lead to depression or any other mental diseases. For instance
, Japan has defined loneliness as a national issue and started to create special services to share a friend to help people socialize. However
, if citizens had thought about living in pairs or groups that would never have been an issue.
In conclusion, in some countries, living alone is preferable for a larger amount of people nowadays than in the past. I believe that it brings
a negative effect because it may reduce population size and trigger mental issues.Verb problem
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