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In some countries, traditional leisure activities like dance, music, and sports are becoming less popular among young people. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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 the development of online services and the internet ,itself young
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 spend more and more
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 playing video games, watching series and surfing the World Wide Web. Taking up a new hobby for the young generation is normal nowadays and I think they have a beneficial impact on them. To start with,
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 as binge-watching series or playing video games help unwind and relax.
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, they serve as an option to escape from worries in real life and
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 can use
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 to calm down.
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 , after a hard day at school or at work
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 can enjoy their favourite game and it would psych up them and give them some energy for
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 work.
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, with all the different plots and scenarios games endeavour
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 to think in creative ways. Thereby, developing
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’s imagination.
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, non-traditional
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 can foster interest in education, especially, in the subject of history.
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, a lot of streaming services do mini-series or films about historical events. Advanced graphics and great quality appeal
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 attention of users and they decide to set aside some
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 to watch those episodes. Shredding light on
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 historical subject not only teaches
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,
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 but
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 evolves their critical thinking.
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, despite all changes in selected leisure
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 and hobbies
people
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 still get positive effects from them. Digitalised hobbies are pleasant to do and at the same ,
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 they enhance a lot of skills that individuals can use in future.
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, those
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 help
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’s mental health and maintain their well being
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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