Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
There are opinions that education organizations
such
as universities should accept the same quantity of male and female students in every subject. I partially agree with
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this
statement and discuss the reasons in the following paragraphs with relevant examples.
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To begin
with, many individuals believe that tuition should be equal for everybody, regardless of gender. Linking Words
In other words
, men or women have the same right Linking Words
for participating
in subjects that they are chosen during the semester. Change preposition
to participate
For example
, some male individuals tended and were talented in knitting or stitching stereotypically thought to be a female's passion. Or vice versa, girls may be interested in software engineering which is intended to be a men's job. Linking Words
Hence
, from my point of view the numbers of males and females, independent of sex, students should be identical in every study.
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On the other hand
, most female people are not able to get an education in some scopes, especially those Linking Words
that
can not hire women because of religious principles. To clarify, Correct pronoun usage
who
such
religious organizations as the catholic church or obligations of the Pope. Linking Words
For instance
, some catholic universities were historically built for male groups. Linking Words
Therefore
, some professions can not be replaced Linking Words
due to
religious attitudes and the same quantity of people and female students are not able to accept in some religious institutes.
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To conclude
, nowadays individuals hold the view that should get equal education opportunities, regardless of gender. Linking Words
However
, I believe that some subjects depend on gender Linking Words
such
as religious institutes where Linking Words
mostly
men are prevalent rather than women.Rephrase
apply
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