The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015.

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information about the number of adults who smoke in different region as Armenia, Egypt , Lebanon, Bangladesh, Cuba, Mexico,

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in 2000 and 2015.

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, We can see that the graph has a world bar which shows that smoking has decreased in the

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gap from 45% to 35% and has seen a decline of 10% in the seven countries which are listed. Armenia had a smoking percentage of 65% in 2000 and had a 10% drop in

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not all Countries saw a decrease in smoking, Egypt and Lebanon had an increase in their smoking average. In 2000 Egypt and Lebanon had 35% Male smokers which in the year 2015 saw

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increase of 15% and 10% respectively. Most of the other countries showed a decrease in smoking , with Bangladesh showing the biggest reducing, falling from 65% to 40% Followed by Cuba which showed the lowest at around 2% with over half of Cuban men smoking in 2015 . Australia and Mexico showed drops in smoking of around a third which is more than the world average.

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the proportion of Men smoking in Australia was 15% less than the world average in both 2000 and 2015.