The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015.
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The bar chart provides
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information about the number of adults who smoke in different region as Armenia, Egypt , Lebanon, Bangladesh, Cuba, Mexico,
Australia
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and Australia
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in 2000 and 2015.
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, We can see that the graph has a world bar which shows that smoking has decreased in the
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gap from 45% to 35% and has seen a decline of 10% in the seven countries which are listed. Armenia had a smoking percentage of 65% in 2000 and had a 10% drop in
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2015. ,
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not all Countries saw a decrease in smoking, Egypt and Lebanon had an increase in their smoking average. In 2000 Egypt and Lebanon had 35% Male smokers which in the year 2015 saw
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increase of 15% and 10% respectively. Most of the other countries showed a decrease in smoking , with Bangladesh showing the biggest reducing, falling from 65% to 40% Followed by Cuba which showed the lowest at around 2% with over half of Cuban men smoking in 2015 . Australia and Mexico showed drops in smoking of around a third which is more than the world average.
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the proportion of Men smoking in Australia was 15% less than the world average in both 2000 and 2015.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • adult male smokers
  • world average
  • time frame
  • notable differences
  • trends
  • reductions
  • increases
  • smoking rates
  • global smoking trends
  • insights
  • summarize
  • overall trends
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