The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
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information about the percentages of
illiteracy
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rates
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in the world by region and gender for the
last
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year.
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, Developed countries had the lowest
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rates
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in both and South Asia had the highest
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rates
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. In All the Regions Mentioned in the Graph Men had Some Fluctuations in
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percentage
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Women in the regions had
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upward trend for
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rate. Looking at the Graph
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shows that the developed countries had the lowest
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rates
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with both
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and
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being around 2%. Male
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were %10 and female
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were %12 in Latin America and the Caribbean, respectively. The highest female
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rates
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were recorded in South Asia, Arab states and Sub-Saharan Africa with
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at %55, %52 and %49 respectively.
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the highest male
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were recorded in the same 3 countries with Arab states being the lowest with around %28.
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, in East Asia and Oceania the male
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rate was around %9
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, the
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of women were %20.
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