The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the process.
The diagram illustrates the stages involved in the process of
chocolate
bar
fabrication while
the pie chart depicts how the price of a chocolate
bar
is split.
Overall
, the whole process has more stages from cocoa
beans, and it is ending with the final product chocolate
bar
or food industry, respectively. Regarding the pie chart, it can be noticed that the highest percentage of the price is distributed to the cost of ingredients while
the smallest one goes to the farmer.
However
the first step from the diagram illustrates how raw Add a comma
,However
cocoa
is grinded
, having Correct your spelling
ground
as a result
cocoa
liquor and waste. Furthermore
, it is produced industrial chocoloate
which is blended with Correct your spelling
chocolates
cocoa
butter and sugar, and in the end results chocolate
bar
. On the other hand
, cocoa
liquor pressed has a result cocoa
butter or powder which have other utilities.
Regarding the pie chart, the costs of ingredients and supermarkets receive roughly a third of the price of the total. Ranked on
Change preposition
in
the
third place are taxes with 15% Correct article usage
apply
while
the revenue for the chocolate
company is just 10%. At least, the farmer,
receives no more than 4%.Remove the comma
apply
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chocolate, bar, cocoa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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