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The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates a particular region before and after the plaza was constructed.
Overall
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, there are massive changes on the left side of the maps so that, it was built a mall and parking area
instead
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 of some nature area and stores.
In addition
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,
the
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a
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 number of residences has
destroyed
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been destroyed
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 after the construction.
It is clear that
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,
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apply
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 the number of houses declines marginally from 8 to 6 buildings after the construction. Half of the accommodation between Main St. and Oak St. was converted to parking lot space.
Also
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, there was not any change for the homes behind Oak St.
According to
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 the left side of the figure, there was a
book store
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bookstore
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 and shoe store in the wood region which was changed into a huge bazaar.
Moreover
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, there was the lake in the centre of the
park
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parking
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 space that was turned into the parking lot zone.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic flow
  • Land use
  • Residential buildings
  • Commercial activities
  • Local businesses
  • Retail stores
  • Local economy
  • Employment
  • Community facilities
  • Displaced
  • Construction
  • Green spaces
  • Pollution
  • Noise
  • Environmental impact
  • Neighborhood dynamics
  • Transformation
  • Redevelopment
  • Infrastructure
  • Urbanization
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