The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevent.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevent.
This
horizontal bar chart shows a comparison of weekly household expenses in an unknown country in 1968 and 2018. The average cost of families was
distinquished
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distinguished
into 8 different categories and
present
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presented
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in values of percentage.
Overall
,
this
can be easily observed that the expense of
food
was
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the highgest
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highgest
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highest
in 1968 and the cost
on
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of
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leisure takes the lead in 2018 and the average spending on fuel and power is lowest both in two years.
Firstly
, it is
noticable
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noticeable
notable
that in 1968 the expenses
of
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housing, wearing and recreation were almost the same which
are
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is
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close to 10%.
However
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in 2018, the
spendings
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spending
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of
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on
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housing and leisure have raised around 10%.
Furthurmore
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Furthermore
, the costs of household goods
of
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for
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both two years kept the same about 8%.
This
chart
also
indicates that except
food
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for food
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,housing,transport and leisure, the rest items are never above 10%. In conclusion, the
addition
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expense of
food
and housing plays a significant portion of total weekly spending and
this
also
shows the inclined trend of
food
expenses.
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