The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.

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These statistics illustrate the number of

sales

at the mini restaurant in the inner-city business region in the particular week of October.

Overall

, the owner of a restaurant earned more money at dinner hour than at lunchtime.

Moreover

, on Friday they had the highest income in that period of time.

According to

this

status, there was the lowest revenue on Sunday by 1550$.

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that, the maximum of

sales

was on Wednesday by roughly 2600$. The amount of income on

the Monday

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, Tuesday and Thursday was approximately 2400$. The number of

sales

on the

saturday

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stood at less than 2000$.

It is clear that

, at

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dinner time, the highest revenue was on

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Friday by almost 4400$.

Due to

this

data, Saturday and Sunday were the lowest

sales

in the period mentioned by 2900 and 2450$, respectively. On

the Monday

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, Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday, the sum of income did not exceed

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3850$.

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The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.

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