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The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.

The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
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These statistics illustrate the number of
sales
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 at the mini restaurant in the inner-city business region in the particular week of October.
Overall
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, the owner of a restaurant earned more money at dinner hour than at lunchtime.
Moreover
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, on Friday they had the highest income in that period of time.
According to
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this
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 status, there was the lowest revenue on Sunday by 1550$.
In contrast
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of
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 that, the maximum of
sales
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 was on Wednesday by roughly 2600$. The amount of income on
the Monday
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Monday
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, Tuesday and Thursday was approximately 2400$. The number of
sales
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 on the
saturday
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Saturday
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 stood at less than 2000$.
It is clear that
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, at
the
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dinner time, the highest revenue was on
the
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Friday by almost 4400$.
Due to
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this
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 data, Saturday and Sunday were the lowest
sales
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 in the period mentioned by 2900 and 2450$, respectively. On
the Monday
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Monday
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, Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday, the sum of income did not exceed
from
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3850$.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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