Some think that the government should tax unhealthy food to uncourage people to eat healthier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Eating
habit
Fix the agreement mistake
habits
has
left too much impact on human life. The impact of Correct subject-verb agreement
have
this
has made many think about solutions to this
. As a matter of that, people think that a high rate of tax on junk food
can be a solution to the issue. I believe forcing a high rate of taxes
cannot change any ones
eating habits.
Correct your spelling
anyone's
Firstly
, high rates
of taxes
will increase the price of fast food
, which divert to having healthy food
, in solving many health issues. In countries like Australia, the authority charges high rates
of taxes
on sugar base
drinks in comparison to other drinks. Correct your spelling
sugar-based
In addition
, the revised rates
allow any government to have more income. That can be useful for the development of the country like, new roads and better medical and health services.
On the other hand
, the implementation of high taxes
is going to affect pockets of the middle class
or the poor class
. The increased price of fast food
will make
divert them towards cheap and unhealthier Verb problem
apply
food
stores. While
the riches
Correct your spelling
rich
class
of society will be unbothered by a hike of food
. In addition
, an increment in street foods will definitely force all food
industries to change the rates
. It will be hard for many food
chains to survive with the hike. As per a survey, recently almost 20% of food
restaurants have winded up their business. This
caused a 1% of
downfall in the income of the government.
In conclusion, implementing Change preposition
apply
taxes
on unhealthy food
will distract many towards nutritious food
and will allow to have some extra income for the government In most cases hike in convenience food
will affect both the middle and the poor class
. In my ,opinion extra taxes
will not make much impact on the lifestyle of many in society.Submitted by jaimini2000 on
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task response
In the introduction, clearly state your position (agree or disagree) with the statement in the prompt.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the structure of the essay by organizing the ideas in a more coherent manner. Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and supports the main argument effectively.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite