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The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.
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The provided two pie graphs illustrate statistical information concerning the percentage of cultural and leisure activities of
boys
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 and
girls
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. As is seen from the presented two charts, there is a difference between
boys
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' and
girls
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' activities. The majority of
boys
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 prefer to play
Computer
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Games
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. The rate of
Computer
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Games
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 is 34%.
However
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, only 16% of
girls
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 play
Computer
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Games
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. The proportion of
boys
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' Reading is only 2%. But, The proportion of
girls
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' Reading is 21% and higher at 19%p than
boys
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. In basketball, Soccer, and Skateboarding number of
boys
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 are significantly high
while
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 no one of the
girls
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 participates. 27% of
girls
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 participate in Dancing, and the percentage is the highest. The rank of Reading is 2nd, and the rank of
Computer
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Games
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 is 3rd. The rate of
girls
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 who participated in Netball and Gymnastics is over 10%,
whereas
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boys
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 don't participate. The ratio of Listening to Music is 10%, and the same for
boys
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, computer, games with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • cultural activities
  • leisure activities
  • participate
  • percentage
  • gender difference
  • similar participation rates
  • traditional gender roles
  • trends
  • impact
  • parental influence
  • extracurricular activities
  • accessible
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