The table below shows personal saving as a percentage of personal income for selected countries in 1970, 1990 and 2010

The table below shows personal saving as a percentage of personal income for selected countries in 1970, 1990 and 2010
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The given table chart illustrates individual savings as a proportion of personal income in 7
countries
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in 1970,1990 and 2000.
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,as the graph shows the highest percentage was in Italy throughout the period.The minor one was in Canada after 30
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.We can
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notice that all the
countries
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' savings decreased,except for the UK. From the period of 1970 and 1990 only Canada rose to 5.9%
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other
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represented a decrease. Germany showed the same results -13.8% during
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period.Italy outlined the biggest proportion for the whole 30
years
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dropped by 11.9% from 29.5 to 17.6.,Meanwhile both UK and USA sketched out a slight decrease,but Japan and France dropped with high percentages with almost the same results 6.2 and 6.4. Next 10
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, personal savings in Canada had a big decrease from 11.5 to 1.9%.
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such
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as France,Japan and the UK increased gradually,
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the rest of the part denoted slight decreases over 10
years
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