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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advatantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, as we can see in contemporary life, everything is progressing day by day.
Therefore
, it is inevitable that everything will be replaced by advanced facilities. Cars and public transports are no exception to these changes. Scientists predict that vehicles will be without drivers so everyone will go travelling just being passengers to be more prices, you will not need to drive for going a trip.
This
 essay will articulate my opinion on the pros and cons of the forthcoming paragraphs. First of all, I believe that
this
 notion has various sides. It would be dangerous when the road has a different driver because the machine driver can predict the sudden dangers and can not manage
this
 kind of situation so it makes a fatal accident. When the owner of the car wants to use the car, the owner should not be under pressure
in other words
 to explain it,
this
 facility has not to make the owner worry.
On the other hand
,
however
, I think the negative point of it might lead to death,
this
 development has another point of my view. It is really interesting to me that it has a property which saves human life. For ,instance we always hear on television news or read in newspapers about the road accident which has happened by sleeping the driver
as a result
 of it comes to help
this
 kind of problem.
To sum up
,
,
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 I stand up for
this
 progress and
also
 it feels that we live in modern life.
Although
 many people said that it causes many damages, my belief is modern problems require modern solutions, generally, everything in future will solve our difficulties.
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