The diagrams below show changes in Happy Valley Shopping Centre in 1982 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show changes in Happy Valley Shopping Centre in 1982 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagrams demonstrate the moderate development in the happy valley shopping
centre
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in 1982 and 2012. If Comparing both diagrams,
then
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it is clearly visible that the lake in 1982 close to the entrance is not removed in 2012.
To begin
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with, in 1982 the
centre
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was more nature friendly because in 2012 so many trees and lakes were removed for the development. Earlier, there was a small way to enter the shopping
centre
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but in 2012 the parking lot was constructed and just opposite
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it, a furniture retail store is created in place of the lake. In 2012, behind the shopping ,
centre
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so many trees were
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removed just to increase the area of the shops. Major changes can be observed, the lobby area and coffee shop now removed in 2012.
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, sports and electronic stores were converted into themed restaurants and both stores were placed in the place of food stores and coffee shops. All these changes lead to an increase in the size of shops
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so that customers can easily explore the products conveniently.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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