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Modern lifestyle are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Explain your views

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It is easier to live in the modern era compared to
people
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lived
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 in the past.
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, there is some negative effect .
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 of how
people
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 live in the modern lifestyle. Some
people
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 can not control to use of technology, especially smartphones and it can
effect
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affect
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their minds. Overuse of smartphones can make our minds anxious, stress, and bad sleep habit. There are some
people
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 who compare with
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 live by seeing photos on social media.
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, they overthink and confused about their lives. In
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 modern era, technology
really
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 helpful for us in our daily activities.
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, we can work or study at home using a computer or laptop if we could not attend physically. We can
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 communicate with
people
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 in other countries using phone calls, video calls, or messages. Another reason why it makes us easier is we can buy online foods or medicines in an application and it will arrive in one or two hours. If we
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 bring a wallet, we can still buy something or do a transaction with mobile banking. Nowadays, transportation
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 makes our life easier. We can send packages like
foods
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food
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, clothes, or anything in one or two days intercity. It is faster than in the past, which can take around 10 days. In conclusion, a lot of
people
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 feel that living in the modern era are more easy compare to the past. Technology and transportation are more develop and have positive effects
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 many
people
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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