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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, ad make compaiosons where relevant

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, ad make compaiosons where relevant
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The given diagrams compare between the floor plan of a central
library
 20 years ago and
central
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the central
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library
 today.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the central
library
 today looks more
spasious
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spacious
 in the middle, and there is an
additinal
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additional
 facility in today’s
library
. There is an unchanged
of
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apply
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entrance location and the size of
library
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the library
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 building. Looking at the information in more detail, tables and chairs
was
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were
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 located in the middle of
building
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the building
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 two decades ago, but today those
were vanished
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vanished
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. Today’s
library
, a children’s
books
room
 moved from the right top corner to
left
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the left
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 corner of
building
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the building
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 where it changed into CDs and computer games;
moreover
, there are sofas and a section for storytelling events in the same
room
.
Children’s
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The children’s
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books
room
 changed into a lecturer
room
. Two decades ago , there were separate rooms for adult
books
 which were fiction and non-fiction, but
adult
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the adult
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 fiction
books
 section changed to a section of reference
books
.
Furthermore
, there was an information desk and some
sel-service
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self-service
 machines in
adult
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the adult
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 fiction
books
room
.
Finally
, in the below sections,
reading
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the reading
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room
 was changed into a computer
room
, and there is no enquire desk because its
room
 changed to a cafe.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, books, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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