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Information technology enable many people to do their chores outside their workplace (e.g at home or while travelling) do the benefits outweigh the disadvantages

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Advanced technologies provoke the incremental population who
work
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 from a distance nowadays. Despite some downsides derived from
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 trends,
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 as procrastination at
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; and less communication in teams, I personally agree that the merits of working from cyber outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand, there are some drawbacks regarding long-distance
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 with individuals and authorities. First of all, there are many causes of distractions at home that make
employees
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 fail to focus on
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, it could be domestic tasks that need to be done or family members who want to have a chat, which leads to a negative effect on their
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 performance.
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, the quality of group communication could be influenced
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 technical issues.
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, many
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 have problems having meetings on ZOOM, a well-known software for having meetings and giving lectures on the internet, since participants
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constantly
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 connection.
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, there are many advantages to working from cyber, including the commuting time that could be saved for conducting
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,
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 cheaper rent for a smaller office since most people will not be working in the office. On top of that, it provides more opportunities for job hopping since
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 could look for job positions in different regions,
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, employers could hire people with lower wages in other nations, which is considered a win-win situation. To summarise, even though the downsides of working from home
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 current technical problems and procrastination are inevitable, I am personally in favour of seeing
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 who
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 from home grow in size since it could foster more advantages.

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