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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#city #life #countryside
In
this
 modern society, it is a common belief that living in a
city
 is more convenient
while
 others argue that the best
life
 is in the
countryside
. In my point of view, I consider that the suburbs are the greatest place to live in. On the one hand, living in the
countryside
 reduces the risk of suffering from some
health
 problems. It means that since towns do not have any industrial zone and the villagers are not preferred petrol means of transport, there is less carbon dioxide than in the
city
 and the atmosphere is
also
 fresher.
As a result
,
people
 from urban would not contract any breathing problems. Research from Bach Khoa University in Vietnam has shown that
people
 who live in the
countryside
 tend to have
a
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longer
life
 than citizens.
Furthermore
, everyone can a cheaper price for everything they buy in the
countryside
.
Due to
 the fact that a large number of food and
stuffs
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stuff
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 here are hand-made and not exported from other countries,
people
 can have loads of quality groceries
with
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a
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half or even three times
prices
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 than in
city
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.
Thus
,
people
 can save their money and protect their
health
while
 living in the country.
On the other hand
, part of guys
are
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 into
city
life
 as it can apply the convenience's facilities in daily
life
.
For example
, residents can easily move everywhere at every time they want with the help of taxis, grab or some types of public transport.
Next,
there are so many places of entertainment in big cities like shopping malls, cinemas, or clubs for
people
 to spend their time with
there
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their
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 family or friends. One another benefit
from
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this
 big
city
 is that it provides many
oppotunities
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opportunities
of
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for
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 job applicants for
the
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graduates from investors,
entrepeneurs
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entrepreneurs
 and factories.
For instance
, a student can easily get a part-time job in every company in his field to earn a living and gain more experience for future work. All in all, big cities are the best choice for one's personal and career development.
Last
, I strongly believe that rural
life
 is better.
Besides
 saving
people
's budget and physical
health
, villagers can get a happier
life
in
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there with a peaceful atmosphere and helpful
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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, escape from stressful busy
life
 and
healing
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 themselves. In conclusion,
while
 both village and
city
 has
its
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 own advantages, I
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still
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sill
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still
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 prefer
life
 in rural areas to have more
health
 and economic benefits

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
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