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The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004.

The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004.
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The table illustrates daily
oil
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generation
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 in 4 particular
countries
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 from 2000 to 2004.
Overall
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,Congo was the leading producer of
oil
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 per
day
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 during the
five-years
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five years
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,
while
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 Chad had the least amount of
oil
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 production per
day
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 over the same period.Meanwhile,Congo had a downtrend in
oil
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generation
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 over time,
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 other
countries
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 were true in the opposite trend. Congo was the top of the
oil
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generation
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countries
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 in 2000 with 275000
barrels
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 per
day
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,
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 it decreased over five years as the result with 203000
barrels
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 per
day
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 in 2004.
Besides
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 that,Nigeria was the second country in
oil
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generation
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 compared to other
countries
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 with 205000 in 2000.
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,Nigeria decreased from 2000 but 2002 was a turning point it had growth in 2003 and 2004,and become the top
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-producing country in 2004. Chad was the unique country in these four
countries
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 because its daily
oil
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generation
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 was 0 from 2000 to 2002.
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,it started increasing in 2003 and had 50000
barrels
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 production of
oil
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 per
day
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 in2004.
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,Somalia was
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 on an upward trend with 5000
barrels
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 per
day
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 in 2000 and growth to 50000
barrels
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 per
day
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 over 5 years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, generation, countries, day, barrels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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