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Some people think that all university students sould study whatever they like. Others believe that they shoyld only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

#people #university #students #sould #study #shoyld #subjects #future #science #technology
There is no doubt these days
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 plays a major role in our lives several
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students
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 their major themselves or to choice
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common
majors
 in their community .The question is, many people believe that during high
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school
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 should have the correct to follow their study
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subjects
while
 others support another idea to starting university they want to follow restricted
majors
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and
 science . In
this
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 my perspective. In terms of positive aspects if pupils find their own ways to get the major they wanted to be
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professional
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because
 they love what they wanted
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their
 major just for find a job .
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 , if students get a
mejor
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major
 they wanted they will feel less stressed , anxious and depressed . The main reason given to support
this
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no need to be more anxious if you get a major you wanted your mental health the first thing than that .
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countries
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countries
 there are not any jobs
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 science and technology
then
 they will choose another study subject
moreover
, we are developing our country there are
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 of
majors
 you should select and be more
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attractive
atractive
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 with it In conclusion, I believe that many students want to get their
majors
 themselves might science and technology will not be available in the future .
therefore
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 you will find your way
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 belief in yourself
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