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Some people think that all university students sould study whatever they like. Others believe that they shoyld only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

#people #university #students #sould #study #shoyld #subjects #future #science #technology
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There is no doubt these days
eduction
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education
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 plays a major role in our lives several
studens
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students
are extremely confuse
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to
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 their major themselves or to choice
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common
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 in their community .The question is, many people believe that during high
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school
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 should have the correct to follow their study
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subjects
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 others support another idea to starting university they want to follow restricted
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 science . In
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 my perspective. In terms of positive aspects if pupils find their own ways to get the major they wanted to be
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professional
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 they love what they wanted
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 , if students get a
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major
 they wanted they will feel less stressed , anxious and depressed . The main reason given to support
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no need to be more anxious if you get a major you wanted your mental health the first thing than that .
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countries
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countries
 there are not any jobs
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 they will choose another study subject
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, we are developing our country there are
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 of
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 you should select and be more
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attractive
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attractive
 with it In conclusion, I believe that many students want to get their
majors
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 you will find your way
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 belief in yourself
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