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Now, plastic bags in shops and supermarkets negatively affects our environment. It is thought that policies should be made to prohibit those plastic shopping bags. From my perspective, I agree entirely with this view for several reasons.

The main reason for banning
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bags
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 is that they pose serious threats to the human environment.
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 they are convenient and can be used multiple times, they are non-biodegradable materials. It would take more than 100 years to completely vanish:
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, causing a vast amount of
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 and
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, soil pollution.
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many wild
animals
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 may accidentally eat
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 debris, especially marine
animals
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. Cruise activities
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 as sailing or organizing parties on the beach allow people to have opportunities to dump garbage into the ocean, and of course, much of the trash is made of
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.
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, the treatment of
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waste
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 by burning it in landfills would contribute to poor air quality.
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, In 2016, U.S.
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 incinerators released the equivalent of 12 million tons of carbon dioxide, more than half of which came from plastics.
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, there’s incineration’s constant production of greenhouse gases. On top of that, the second salient point is that
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bags
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 have a bad effect on humans. Microplastics can easily enter the human body and cause serious diseases. Some chemicals in
plastic
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bags
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 can disrupt the normal functioning of hormones in the body, once the marine
animals
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 consume these chemicals, they move through the food web and later into the humans, who consume fish
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 other marine
animals
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. As for
plastic
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waste
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, which is processed in the form of incineration, it will produce toxic gases including dioxins, furans, etc., which affect the endocrine glands, reduce immunity, and cause cancer. To summarize, It is very necessary to ban
plastic
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bags
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 in the near future in order to protect both the environment and wild
animals
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’ life.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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