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Outdoor advertising is very present in our society. It has evolved significantly, from simple paper posters to announcements on digital
medias
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. Advertising can be very effective and impact the viewer.
However
, it can
also
 become dull whenever it is used in excess.
This
 form of
media
 represents a few
challenge
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 for its creators. These people have to get the customer’s attention for them to buy a specific thing, assist
to
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 an event or simply learn a fact. Today, advertisements are able to entertain us using
colorful
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 videos and images that persuade us.
This
media
 enlightens our world adding colors, images and music to the dull streets. The creativity of the founders has no limits: advertisements never cease to attract the public.
Nevertheless
, an excess of advertisements can
also
 ruin the landscapes.
This
media
, especially in the digital world, can annoy the viewers.
Furthermore
, it could
also
 be considered a waste of time and work because some people do not even look at them anymore.
Hence
. These announcements become wasteful and damaging to the environment. In conclusion, outdoor advertising can be very effective and aesthetic
as well as
 dull and excessive. In my opinion,
this
 type of
media
 is
esential
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essential
 in today’s society as long as it is used in moderation.
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