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The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities.

The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities.
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The table illustrates the information about public transportation and compares six different metro systems which are located
in
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 3 different Continents , Asia , Europe and North America. New York City
subway
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 has a total of 24
lines
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 which is the highest number of
lines
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in
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 the list with a distance covered of around 659
miles
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 and annual journeys being at 1.65
billion
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 with 2.50$ a single
ticket
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. Followed by the second largest
Subway
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 system in the list located in Beijing, China with 19
lines
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 covering a length of 357
miles
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 and per
ticket
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 costing around 0.45$ and the largest number of annual journeys up to 3.6
billion
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 passengers. ,
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 We can see that the Paris metro has 16 which cover a distance of 127
miles
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 with a
ticket
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 being around $2.30. London's tube has 11
lines
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 which cover around 249
miles
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 with 1.2
billion
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journey
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journeys
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 with a single
ticket
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 costing $7.30 the most expensive
ticket
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 in the whole list.
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, Mexico City metro has 12
lines
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 which cover an area of 140
miles
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 with a cost of $0.23 per
ticket
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. Mexico's
subway
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 is
least
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 expensive which can save a lot of money with 1.6
billion
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travelers
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. Tokyo's
Subway
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 has 13
lines
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 with a distance covered up to 189
miles
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 and 3.1
billion
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 people travel with tickets being at $1.64.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subway, lines, miles, billion, ticket with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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