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Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people’s lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#society #people #people’s #lives #threat #life #earth
Genetic engineering is
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community
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in
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present
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 time. Some individuals believe that it will enhance
people
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 lives in several methods. Others think that it may be a represent danger to
life
 on
earth
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. In my perspective, the merits of genetic
modification
 outweigh the demerits. On the one hand, some think that genetic engineering can
harmful
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 to
life
in
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 our planet. They believe genetic
modification
 can have a negative
impacts
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 on the
envrionemnt
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environment
as well as
 human
life
 .
This
 is because until now
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scinetists
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scientists
 do not know the long-term consequences of genetic
modification
.
Therefore
, genetic
modification
 maybe can spread unknown diseases .
On the other hand
, I would
like
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 agree with those people who believe that the benefits of genetic engineering
significantly
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 more than
downsides
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the downsides
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.
To begin
 with,
the
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genetic engineering for
food
 can help to meet the need
of
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the dramatical
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dramatical
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 growth of
population
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the population
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.
This
 is
due to
 the fact that
,
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the
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genetic
modification
 can contribute to
make
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food
 grow quickly and more
resist
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 to insects, and
also
 can help
food
 grow
on
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 bad circumstances namely, bad soil,
climate
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and climate
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 change.
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,
the
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gene
modified
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 can
used
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 in babies to protect them from inherited diseases
such
 as
,
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 cancer, diabetes,
disability
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and disability
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.
As a result
, genetic
modification
 can
boosts
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 the
overall
 health of people. In conclusion, In my opinion, the upsides of genetic
engieering
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engineering
 outperform the downsides, because genetic
engieering
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engineering
 can make
food
 more available for the whole world,
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protect individuals from inherited serious illnesses and
then
 increase their
life
 expectancy.
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