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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar graph illustrates the outcomes of a survey about
individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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coffee
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 and tea purchasing and drinking habits in five major urban areas in Australia.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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went
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going
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 to a café for
coffee
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 or tea in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks is the most popular in all given cities,
whereas
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bought
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buying
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 fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks is the
lasts
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last
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 popular. Looking at the chart in more
details
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detail
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, regarding
went
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going
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 to a café for
coffee
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 or tea
the
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apply
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Melbourne cities showed the highest
precentage
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percentage
was
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almost 63 %,
while
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the
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apply
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Adelaide showed the lowest proportion
was
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approximately 49 %.
The both
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hobart
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Hobart
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 and Sydney
has
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the
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a
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 very close percentage
was
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62 and 61 % ,respectively. In terms of bought instant
coffee
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the
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apply
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Brisbance
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Brisbane
 and Hobart was the highest percentage about 54 and 52 % , respectively,
while
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the
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apply
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Sydney was the lowest almost 45%. Regarding
bought
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buying
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 fresh
coffee
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 the top percentage was for Sydney and Melbourne around 44 and 43 %, respectively.
In contrast
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,
the
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apply
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Brisbance
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Brisbane
 and Adelaide
has
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have
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the
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a
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 similar and lowest proportion
was
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apply
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around 34%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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