Some children spend hours everyday on their smart phones. Why is this the case ? do you think this is a positive or a negative development ?
The
current world Change preposition
In the
due to
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advancement
of science and technology, everything happens through Add an article
the advancement
the
smartphones. Correct article usage
apply
In
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addition
adults Add a comma
,addition
as well as
kids pass Linking Words
time
typically through it. To my way of thinking various kids Use synonyms
spend
hours online Correct pronoun usage
who spend
has
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have
a
positive Correct article usage
apply
as well as
negative Linking Words
development
. Both the reasons and my view is elaborated Use synonyms
further
.
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One
the one hand, nowadays Correct your spelling
On
Use synonyms
children’s
learn more on their Change noun form
children
cellphones
rather than physically. Correct your spelling
cell phones
Furthermore
, tremendous apps and websites are available Linking Words
in
every Change preposition
on
smartphones
, Change to a singular noun
smartphone
children’s
could easily use and access Use synonyms
it
. Correct pronoun usage
them
For example
, Linking Words
firstly
if a child feels to play , there are various gaming apps to play like Linking Words
lingo
, coco-mo , barbie and many more. Capitalize word
Lingo
Secondly
, if they like to watch Linking Words
cartoon
Fix the agreement mistake
cartoons
such
as sponge bob , peppa pig , jacky chan and so on. Linking Words
These video
can be seen Change the determiner
This video
These videos
in
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on
the
youtube or either in Correct article usage
apply
the
Netflix. Correct article usage
apply
However
, not like Linking Words
old
days the current generation Correct article usage
the old
are
more adapted to technology. At the same Correct subject-verb agreement
is
time
, many Use synonyms
children’s
school and classes are happening Use synonyms
through
online Change preposition
apply
in
their smartphones. Generally speaking , after covid-19 whole world eventually adapted to online school. Change preposition
on
Due to
it kids can save their Linking Words
time
, focus and study at their Use synonyms
comport
place.
Correct your spelling
comfort
On the other hand
, owing to hang around the phone for Linking Words
long
Change the article
a long
time
could elaborate Use synonyms
adverse
. Change the adjective
adversely
To begin
with , they experience so many health problems later on in their life. Linking Words
For example
, our eyes get Linking Words
strain
by looking at the screen for Wrong verb form
strained
considerable
Add an article
a considerable
time
. Use synonyms
Hence
, Linking Words
get
Wrong verb form
getting
migrane
known as a severe headache and Correct your spelling
migraine
eye sight
problems and so on Correct your spelling
eyesight
in
forthcoming.
In conclusion , Correct your spelling
is
children’s
disburse their Use synonyms
time
on cellphones Use synonyms
are
considered Correct subject-verb agreement
is
as
a factual Change preposition
apply
development
. Use synonyms
Nevertheless
, to avoid adverse Linking Words
development
, Use synonyms
its
better to limit their screen Correct your spelling
it's
time
. In my opinion , I think positive Use synonyms
development
Use synonyms
outweigh
negative Correct subject-verb agreement
outweighs
development
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