Some children spend hours everyday on their smart phones. Why is this the case ? do you think this is a positive or a negative development ?

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current world
due to
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the advancement
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of science and technology, everything happens through
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smartphones.
In
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adults
as well as
kids pass
time
typically through it. To my way of thinking various kids
spend
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hours online
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a
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positive
as well as
negative
development
. Both the reasons and my view is elaborated
further
.
One
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On
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the one hand, nowadays
children’s
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children
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learn more on their
cellphones
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cell phones
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rather than physically.
Furthermore
, tremendous apps and websites are available
in
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on
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every
smartphones
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smartphone
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,
children’s
could easily use and access
it
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them
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.
For example
,
firstly
if a child feels to play , there are various gaming apps to play like
lingo
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, coco-mo , barbie and many more.
Secondly
, if they like to watch
cartoon
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cartoons
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such
as sponge bob , peppa pig , jacky chan and so on.
These video
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can be seen
in
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on
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the
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youtube or either in
the
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Netflix.
However
, not like
old
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days the current generation
are
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more adapted to technology. At the same
time
, many
children’s
school and classes are happening
through
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apply
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online
in
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on
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their smartphones. Generally speaking , after covid-19 whole world eventually adapted to online school.
Due to
it kids can save their
time
, focus and study at their
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comfort
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place.
On the other hand
, owing to hang around the phone for
long
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time
could elaborate
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adversely
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.
To begin
with , they experience so many health problems later on in their life.
For example
, our eyes get
strain
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strained
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by looking at the screen for
considerable
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a considerable
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time
.
Hence
,
get
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migrane
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migraine
known as a severe headache and
eye sight
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eyesight
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problems and so on
in
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is
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forthcoming. In conclusion ,
children’s
disburse their
time
on cellphones
are
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considered
as
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a factual
development
.
Nevertheless
, to avoid adverse
development
,
its
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it's
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better to limit their screen
time
. In my opinion , I think positive
development
outweigh
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outweighs
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negative
development
.
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