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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps
illustrates
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access
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the access
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 route to
city
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a city
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 hospital in 2007 and in 2010. They demonstrate that since 2007 public access
road
 has been developed and changed a great deal as new facilities have been added. In 2007 , there was a
car
park
 for staff and
public
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the public
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 in the south of
city
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the city
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 hospital. The bus stops are across the hospital
road
. South furthers there is a
city
road
. The outline of future growth depicts the significant growth and modifications of
inclusive
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the inclusive
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 infrastructure of the area between
ring
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the ring
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road
 and
city
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the city
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road
.
Firstly
 , the
car
park
 for
public
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the public
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 and staff has been fractionated.
Moreover
 ,
car
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the car
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park
 for
public
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the public
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 has been opened up next to
city
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the city
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 hospital
whereas
staff
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the staff
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car
park
locate
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 in the same place.
Secondly
 , the bus stops
demolished
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were demolished
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 and constructed in the
south west
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southwest
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 of
city
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the city
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 hospital. In order that , two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 has been built between
city
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the city
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 hospital and hospital
road
 and
second
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a second
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 in the
south east
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southeast
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 of the bus station and
center
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centre
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 of
city
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the city
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road
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, road, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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