Women can do everything that men can and they even do it better. They also can do many things that men cannot. But it is a fact that their work is not appreciated as much as men, although they have to sacrifice a lot for their family and career. What do you think?

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The society
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has been looking at
women
and
men
in different
prospect
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prospects
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. Even god has created them with different traits. But it has been differentiated by religion and
culture
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practice from ancient times.
Let
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Let's
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discuss both
the
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views in
this
essay.
Firstly
,
men
and
women
are not physically equal.
It’s
due to
their genetics and stamina aren’t
same
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the same
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.
For instance
, Olympics sports are separated by gender
thus
it’s
not fair enough to play without equal components.
Moreover
,
Men
are physically stronger than
Women
.
However
,
A
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men
could not bear the pains which
women
faces
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face
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in their life.
For example
,
firstly
when a girl
attend
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attends
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puberty , she gets her
periods
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period
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every month , literally till gets 40 years old.
Thus
monthly she has to bear cramps , cravings , mood swings and many more.
Secondly
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when a
women
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woman
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gets pregnant throughout the pregnancy time for nine months she has to sacrifice a lot for that child.
Lastly
,
during
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apply
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giving birth
more
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tougher for her.
Child birth
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Childbirth
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is the most painful and endangerment for a female.
However
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men
cannot bear these pains though
it’s
not appreciated by
Men
are
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who are
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totally abusive.
Secondly
,
women
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women's
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works
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work
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are not applauded.
It’s
mainly
men
thinks
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who thinks
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women
should be below them,
shouldn’t
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and shouldn’t
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treat them equally.
For instance
, if a lady employee did a great job for the company but
its
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it's
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not much appreciated
due to
gender inequality. It has been happening from ancient times till now bastards expect and let them be only in
house
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the house
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and do only house works and look after
children’s
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children
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.
specially
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especially
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men
doesn’t
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don’t
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appreciate
women
’s
dream
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dreams
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and
career
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careers
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.
However
,
this
traditionally
happen
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happens
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in India and most of the
country’s
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countries
country
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. In conclusion ,
Men
are
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who are
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physically stronger than
women
can be accepted
thus
women
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women's
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works
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work
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are not appreciated
also
can be verified ,
lastly
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,lastly
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I totally agree with
this
notion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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