The map below shows the village of Stokefort in 1930 and 2010.

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The maps illustrate changes in the village of Stokeford between 1930 and 2010.

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, in 1930 Stokeford was a rural area, but in 2010 it became more residential.

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to the west of the central road, which runs from the bridge in the north to the south part of the village, shops and farmlands were removed and new houses were built

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, two new ways were joined to the central street. The only building that did not undergo any changes was the post office.

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, to the east of the main ,street the village experienced even more development, which includes not only farm destruction and the construction of new housing areas but

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the replacement of gardens and a Large house with a new retirement home.

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, the Primary school was expanded by adding two new wings.

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, two roads were added. In conclusion, the area had changed a lot by the year 2010.

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The map below shows the village of Stokefort in 1930 and 2010.

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

Some experts believe that learning a foreign language should start at primary school rather than secondary school. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business, and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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