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The number of car – owners is increasing every day because every person expects the freedom to travel and comfort while traveling. And that is why most of us want to own a car. However, owning a car has many good points and limitation as well. Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss advantages and disadvantages of having a car.

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These days, having a
car
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 is a necessary demand
of
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people
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, because it allows
people
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 to travel whenever and wherever they want without public
transports
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. The increasing
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people
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number of people
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 having a
car
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 has both positive and negative impacts on individuals and society. On the one hand, Owning a
car
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 is beneficial in some ways.
Firstly
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,
People
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 could easier to commute by their own
car
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. Take
people
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 who lived far away from
working
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for example
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. By using a
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, it
provide
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 them to travel to the workplace over a long distance in safety way.
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,
people
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 could go back home by their
car
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 at late night when
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public transport
are
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 closed.
Secondly
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,
people
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 buying a vehicle is a good way to show off their wealth. In Vietnam,
the
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cars are more costly than
other
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in other
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 countries.
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, sometime
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 owners could prove their success
with
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 others.
On the other hand
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, there are several disadvantages of an increasing number of
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 owners. First of all,
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 a growth in the number of vehicles, it could lead to air pollution and traffic jam. It is obvious that exhaust fume from vehicles appears to be a major factor contributing to environmental degradation in the city.
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, more individual vehicles in the street is a roof of traffic congestion.
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, Hanoi - the capital of Vietnam nowadays has faced air contamination and the overload of stress, on account of the growth rapid in the number of cars. In conclusion, buying a
car
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 could be both advantages and disadvantages for individuals and society.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ownership
  • Convenience
  • Public Transport
  • Ride-sharing
  • Efficient
  • Privacy
  • Status Symbol
  • Financial Costs
  • Maintenance
  • Fueling
  • Pollution
  • Global Warming
  • Congestion
  • Frustration
  • Fossil Fuels
  • Geopolitical Tensions
  • Urban Planning
  • Infrastructure
  • Aesthetic
  • Functionality
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