The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The presented chart describes the comparison of 31% in
restaurant
-going people
who were habituated to eating food
outside of the home between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, in the year
,2003 every day only 4.5% people
went for fast Change preposition
of people
food
. However
, in the year
2006 and also
in the year
2013 the rate
decreased to 3%.
Here come the people
who were in the restaurant
several times a week. In 2003 17% of people
ate outside food
. Whereas
this
percentage was
fell by 2.5% in the Unnecessary verb
apply
year
2013.
In addition
, once a week those who had restaurant
food
in the year
2013Add a missing verb
were
rate
. This
rate
increased by 2% in 2006 and down to 27% by 2013.
More, the number of people
who were in the restaurant
once or twice a month in the year
2003 were
30%. Correct subject-verb agreement
was
Although
this
rate
has downward in the year
2006 and rise again in the year
2013 by 8%.
A few times in a year
, people
who went for outside food
in the year
2003 the percentage was 12.5% and it increased to 15% by 2006 and remain content till 2013.
Finally
, for those who had never been to a restaurant
in the year
2003
the Add a comma
,2003
rate
was 5% and decreased by 1% in the year
2006 and remain the same in the year
2013.Submitted by kaynath87 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, year, rate, restaurant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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