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Houses are essential for people. Some people think that the government should offer free houses for people who cannot afford to pay for it. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there are
people
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 arguing that the government should offer free accommodation for those who can hardly buy or rent a house. In my opinion, I fully agree with
this
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policy
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.
To begin
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 with, it is indispensable for the government to take care of
citizens
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citizens'
citizen's
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 basic living needs, especially in
living
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the living
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 aspect. By offering houses, poverty
people
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 who live from him to mow can be supportive, and at least
last
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 worried about their safety.
Besides
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, in some countries in the house, prices are extremely high, causing
young
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the young
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generations’s
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generations’
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 anxiety. It is the imbalance
of
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in
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 the distribution of the housing resource that cost money, social issues,
such
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 as homeless
people
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, criminals, and safety
concern
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concerns
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 in every corner in several countries.
Furthermore
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, if the government provides free living spaces for
people
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, it will enhance the coherence and stability
in
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of
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 the country.
Therefore
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, individuals can live a decent life without arduously struggling
for
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with
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 house expenses. They will have more time to learn new skills or improve their psychological statutes, which foster a society of informed individuals capable of navigating the complexities of the modern world, creating a virtuous circle. In sum, I believe that
people
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’s quality of life will dramatically
increased
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be increased
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 by the government’s
policy
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. With a generous
policy
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such
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 as offering accommodation to citizens,
people
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 from all walks of life gain their dignity. And it is evitable that the society will continue to thrive
due to
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 the prevail and the
implement
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 of the
policy
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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