you have read and artical in and international travel magazine which contained some information about your town is incorrect

#travel #magazine #information #town

I am writing

this

letter,regarding on

last

week publish your travel newspaper one

article

about my town.my concern with that

article

is about one paragraph.The writer included the wrong information about my village. First of all,

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would like to inform, you

the

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that the

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article

mentioned in my town inside has a water rafting activity. Unfortunately,

last

six

month

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ago prohibited all of them.The reason is that have been environmental issues.

Furthermore

, I know your newspaper is very popular in the

tourrisam

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tourism

sector ,and

also

,our local people many of them are reading

this

magazine

Thus

above mentions wrong information

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a result,

infuture

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in future

will be reduced visiting people our city .Because ,my kind request ,as soon as possible please be correct wrong information in next

magazine

. My suggestion is,please be your kind attention before printing and

also

try to do your best

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full

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the full

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a magazine

the magazine

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magazine

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magazines

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one time before publishing.I feel you can understand what I say,

thus

, I hope you will be the correct

article

in the next

magazine

. I look forward to receiving your response. Yours faithfully, Himali

Submitted by himali.deepthi75 on Sat Jul 01 2023

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

175 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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you have read and artical in and international travel magazine which contained some information about your town is incorrect

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