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you have read and artical in and international travel magazine which contained some information about your town is incorrect

#travel #magazine #information #town
I am writing
this
 letter,regarding on
last
 week publish your travel newspaper one
article
 about my town.my concern with that
article
 is about one paragraph.The writer included the wrong information about my village. First of all,
i
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 would like to inform, you
the
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that the
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article
 mentioned in my town inside has a water rafting activity. Unfortunately,
last
 six
month
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 ago prohibited all of them.The reason is that have been environmental issues.
Furthermore
, I know your newspaper is very popular in the
tourrisam
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tourism
 sector ,and
also
,our local people many of them are reading
this
magazine
.
Thus
 above mentions wrong information
as
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 a result,
infuture
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in future
 will be reduced visiting people our city .Because ,my kind request ,as soon as possible please be correct wrong information in next
magazine
. My suggestion is,please be your kind attention before printing and
also
 try to do your best
double check
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full
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 of
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a magazine
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magazine
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 one time before publishing.I feel you can understand what I say,
thus
, I hope you will be the correct
article
 in the next
magazine
. I look forward to receiving your response. Yours faithfully, Himali
Submitted by himali.deepthi75 on

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