The diagrams illustrate some changes and planned development in the BRIGHTSEA along the coastal zone.

The diagrams illustrate some changes and planned development in the BRIGHTSEA along the coastal zone.
These three maps depict modifications done at the coastal zone of Brightsea from 1950 until today, and the
further
development plans.
Overall
, the development plan of the coast illustrates
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facilities than it were in 1950.
Also
, the jetty and the lighthouse are the only places which keep their initial position. Looking more closely, over a period of 50 years which began in 1950 a new road was built on the east side of the map.
Then
, the lighthouse
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house was demolished and replaced with a hotel. On the side covered by water, a new construction it can be noticed which is called
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a ferry
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wharf. On developing
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, an extension will be added to the main hotel and a sailing club will be constructed next to it. In the northeast corner is planned a residential area with a restaurant and apartments
while
in shop place will be car parks
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and a huge supermarket.
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