The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and

locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The two diagrams show a study result of the main goal for individuals aged 20 to 50 years old in exercising and where they do them. In general, most
of
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the
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people are keen to
exercise
because of the recreational and leisure aspect.
Meanwhile
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the most preferred place to do the
exercise
is the private gym facilities. Almost half of the participants chose
recreational
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the recreational
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aspect as the goal for their
exercise
activity with forty
percent
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of the share.
However
, three of the following aims that consist of muscle toning,
weightloss
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, and disease prevention are closely related in the context of health-oriented goals which show that both leisure and health
aspect
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are both important for someone to give them the motivation and goal to
exercise
. More than a third of the adults at the rate of 35
percent
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prefer to
exercise
at the gyms
while
the rest tend to
exercise
in public sports venues, parks, playgrounds, or other public spaces where each
of
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the
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spot
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are
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chosen by around 15 to 20
percent
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per cent
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of participants.
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