Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today.

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is a concept most important around the world. It can

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problems and questions.

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environment

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to say that it will solve the problems the world face today. In my

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may be the cause of all

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effort. First and foremost, our planet is in danger. Wherever you go,

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needed

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some kind of help around the

environment

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anywhere. In

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whit strong machines, which help to do the job quickly, became a

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problem

and not a solution. At the same

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industies

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industries

found solutions to them with

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and the world become more sadder to live

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the same time, I think would be

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help the

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pollution

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, ideas about solutions for deforestation, gases and

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in rivers. More and more, we need to buy water

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. Nowadays, is very difficult you see that, become almost impossible. In conclusion,

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is strong,

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a lot and nowadays is impossible to live without it.

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of issues and the

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is becoming weak. I do not know what our place is going to be next

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today.

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Some experts believe that it it better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advaantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development?

In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex school have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?